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The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart provides information on: the proportion of citrus fruits and the top different countries that were exported in 2012 . It is obvious that there are some significant changes in the given figures.
Overall
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, there was an upward trend in lemons in Mexico
while
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,
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 there was a downward trend in others in the United States .
According to
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 the graphs,for both lemons and
others
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 the highest category was in Mexico reaching over 500
which
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while
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 the rest of
countries
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the countries
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 had a decline in percentages.
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, the United States had a decrease
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 in grapefruits and oranges . The second was Mexico and Egypt .
Similarly
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, Turkey had a rise in
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the numbers
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numbers
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in
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 grapefruits reaching 400.
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, the highest country in all proportion was South Africa at 1000.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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