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The line graph below displays the unemployment rates among university graduates in Australia, Canada, Germany, and Japan from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below displays the unemployment rates among university graduates in Australia, Canada, Germany, and Japan from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
unemployment
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rates
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 among academically educated individuals in three European countries—
Spain
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, Italy, and
Germany
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—over a 15-year
period
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 starting from 1991.
Overall
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,
Spain
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 consistently had the highest
unemployment
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 rate for most of the
period
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, except for a two-year exception.
In contrast
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,
Germany
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 maintained the lowest
unemployment
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 rate throughout the
period
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. Despite fluctuations in
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rates
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, the rankings of the countries remained mostly unchanged from 1991 to 2004.
However
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, in 2004,
Germany
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 and
Spain
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 switched places, resulting in
Germany
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 having the highest
unemployment
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 rate, followed by
Spain
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 and Italy. It is notable that each country experienced significant fluctuations over time. Until 1997, all three countries showed a steady increase in
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rates
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, except for
Spain
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, which began to decline from 1995. After 1997,
Spain
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 and Italy saw a decrease in their
rates
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,
while
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Germany
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 experienced a sharp increase, allowing it to surpass the other two countries by the end of the
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rates, period, spain, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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