You have a problem with a recently hired employee in your workplace. Write a letter to the HR manager. In your letter: Describe the problem the new employee has caused Explain how other employees about the new employee’s conduct Say how you expect the HR manager to address the situation.

Dear Manager, I am writing
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letter to regarding I have problem with new
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in my
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. I hope you fast respond about the issue and
you
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take action
this
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problem
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First
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of all, I would like to describe
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the issue to
new
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employee's
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,
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they
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mistake
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and
not
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hear
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instruction
instructions
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instructions
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boss
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staff
and they
are
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fell difficult to learn new
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in the
company
secondly
they are always late
come
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to
office
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and they can not
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discipline
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, Other employees always training the new
employee's
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but the new
employee's
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can not follow
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rule
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the
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company
and they are
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permission
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came
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back in
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job desk
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and the
company
can not work well. they
are
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can not work
together with
other employees I hope you take fast action
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issue and you can look for other new employees that
suitable
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for your
company
from
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experience
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skils
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. Thank you so much for your time, I hope you
still
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healtly
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healthy
. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
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sincerely . purnoo
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Make sure to proofread your letter for spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity.
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Try to provide more detailed and specific examples for your complaints to make them more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by organizing your letter into clear paragraphs with each one covering a single idea.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows logically into the next with appropriate transitional phrases.
greeting and closing
You have included an introduction and a closing which is important for any formal letter.
suitable writing tone
Your tone is generally polite and formal, which is suitable for a letter to the HR manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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