The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the pie charts illustrate the comparison of different kinds of energy
production
of
France in 2005 and 2005.
generally speaking, the coal, gas and petro productions were dominated both in 1995 and 2005 Change preposition
in
while
the nuclear and other outputs were in a minimum amounts
.
in detail, the number of coal Correct the article-noun agreement
a minimum amount
minimum amounts
production
was
slightly Verb problem
apply
risen
from 29.80 Wrong verb form
rose
percent
in 1995 to 30.93 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in 2005. Change the spelling
per cent
similarly
, the total production
of gas was have
a Change the verb form
had
little
increase from 29.63 Correct word choice
small
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
in
the beginning to 30.31 Change preposition
at
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
in
the end of Change the preposition
at
period
. the amount of nuclear Add an article
the period
result
Fix the agreement mistake
results
also
rocketed to 10.10 percent
in 2005 from 6.40 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
previously. and unlike the others, the petro's output has decreased from 29.27 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
to 19.55 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in the periods. the other energy Change the spelling
per cent
production
also
jump
up from 4.90 Change the verb form
jumps
percent
in 1995 to 9.10 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in 2005.
we can conclude that France produced the most coal's energy in the Change the spelling
per cent
last
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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