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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the pie charts illustrate the comparison of different kinds of energy
production
of
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 France in 2005 and 2005. generally speaking, the coal, gas and petro productions were dominated both in 1995 and 2005
while
 the nuclear and other outputs were in
a minimum amounts
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a minimum amount
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. in detail, the number of coal
production
was
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slightly
risen
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rose
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 from 29.80
percent
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per cent
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 in 1995 to 30.93
percent
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per cent
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 in 2005.
similarly
, the total
production
 of gas
was have
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 a
little
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small
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 increase from 29.63
percent
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in
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 the beginning to 30.31
percent
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in
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 the end of
period
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. the amount of nuclear
result
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results
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also
 rocketed to 10.10
percent
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per cent
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 in 2005 from 6.40
percent
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 previously. and unlike the others, the petro's output has decreased from 29.27
percent
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 to 19.55
percent
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 in the periods. the other energy
production
also
jump
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 up from 4.90
percent
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per cent
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 in 1995 to 9.10
percent
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 in 2005. we can conclude that France produced the most coal's energy in the
last
 10 years
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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