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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie chart depicts the comparison of
energy
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production
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 during a specific period .It is clear from the graph that gas had the largest value of
Energy
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production
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 ,
whereas
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 the other material contributed the lowest compared to other kinds of
energy
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production
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.
According to
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 what is shown Coal had the most significant amount of power
production
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 29 %in 1995 and 30 % in 2005 .Following that , gas
production
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 was at 29.63 which later increased to 30 %in 2005
In contrast
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 , petroleum material was made up to 29.7 %in 1995
then
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 declined to 19.55 % in 2005 . It can be seen that the ratio of nuclear
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 in 1995 was 6.40 % which eventually grew to 10 %in 2005 and other materials were at 4.90 % in 1995
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 reached 9.10 % in 2005 .
To sum up
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 we could say that ،gas and Coal covered the highest percentage of
energy
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production
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 compared to other sources .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production, %in with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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