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The charts below show the proportions of British students one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the
number
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 of students in British could speak other
languages
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 in both
of
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apply
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years when
,
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2000 and 2010. The
higgher
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higher
 range in both years was the groups who could speak
spanish
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Spanish
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 only. The
amount
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 of students who just spoke French was 15
percent
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per cent
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 in 2000,
also
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another
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languages
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 were on the same level
with
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as
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 them. The percentage of
student
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students
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 who could speak German only and another language was both 10%,
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, no other language was 20 in 100 in
british
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British
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 students . In 2010
this
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 amount has
cahanged normaly
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changed normally
, The
number
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 of Spanish only increased to 35%,and French only decreased to 10% even
dough
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though
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 two other
language
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 up to 15%. The person who
were
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was
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 able to speak
another
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other
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languages
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 become more by 20% in 2010.
although
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 the
number
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 of no other
languages
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 fell to 10%. Generally, the
number
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 of people who could speak German only did not change and was
a
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apply
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like in 2000 and 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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