The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
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The graph illustrates the number of
men
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women
ages 15 to 65 and over, who did regular Use synonyms
activicties
in 2010.
The number of Correct your spelling
activities
men
who were between 15 to 24 by more than 50% was more than Use synonyms
women
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in
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amoung
them in ages 25 to 34 Correct your spelling
among
men
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almoust
42 percent and Correct your spelling
almost
women
increased by 48%. During the time when Use synonyms
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female
boomed Fix the agreement mistake
females
by52.2
and Correct your spelling
by 52.2
men
decreased by 39.5 Use synonyms
percent
. age 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 both of Change the spelling
per cent
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this
people groups had not any big change and were in the same, Correct determiner usage
these
men
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approximaitly
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women
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53 or more. Correct your spelling
almost
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activty
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activity
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men
by 46.7 and Use synonyms
women
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by 47.1
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35 to
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