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The chart and graph below give information about three categories of workers in Australia and the unemployment levels within those groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and graph below give information about three categories of workers in Australia and the unemployment levels within those groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in two bar charts is the information pertaining to the proportion of
the
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workers
 who have
age
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 from 60 to 64 in four nations in both genders in 1970 and 2000. The data has been measured in
percentage
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.
Overall
, it can be seen that
workers
 in all countries increased throughout the period with the exception of female
workers
 in
USA
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the USA
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 and Australia. It should be noted how all male
employments
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employment
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 has a significant growth. Moving
onto
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 the female
workers
, Belgium and Japan rose gradually from 7 to 8 and from 40 to 43, respectively.
In contrast
,
USA
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the USA
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 had a steady drop from 38 to 36
while
 Australia decreased from 38 to 36 after 30 years. With regard to the male
workers
, Belgium had the most significant growth from 19 to 79. In
USA
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the USA
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, the increase was less remarkably from 55 to 77.
Similarly
, Japan rose slowly from 74 to 86. In Australia, it grew significantly from 47 to 76.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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