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The chart below shows the proportion of profits made from the seven most viewed movie genres in US cinemas in 1995, 2000, and 2005 as a percentage of the total earnings of the US film industry for each year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of profits made from the seven most viewed movie genres in US cinemas in 1995, 2000, and 2005 as a percentage of the total earnings of the US film industry for each year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows the proportion of
profits
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 made
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from
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 the seven most popular movie
genres
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 in the US in 1995, 2000, and 2005 as a percentage of the total for the industry.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
profits
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 from all the
genres
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 fluctuated across the three years, with
adventure
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 and
drama
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 changing the most.
Furthermore
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,
adventure
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,
comedy
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, action, and
drama
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 generated considerably more
profits
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thatn
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than
 the other three
genres
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. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that in 1995,
drama
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 out as the most lucrative
genre
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 since it accounted for almost one-third of the film industry's total
profits
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.
Drama
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 was followed by
comedy
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, which generated 20% of the industry's
profits
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,
while
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 action was the third
highest grossing
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genre
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 at 17%.
Adventure
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 was
also
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sucessful
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successful
, representing close to 15% of the total, which was nearly equal to the combined
profits
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 of the three
genres
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 that made the least money. In 2000,
comedy
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 became the most profitable
genre
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, surging five percentage points above its 1995 figure. An upward trend was
also
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 evident that year for thrillers, musicals, and animated films. Meanwhile, the other
genres
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 were less profitable that year, with the earnings generated by dramas decreasing the most. In 2005,
comedy
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 remained the most profitable
genre
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 and its profit share increased to above 25%.
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 the
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from
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nimated
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animated
 films
also
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 grew,
adventure
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 movies gained the most compared to 2000.
Adventure
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 became the second most profitable
genre
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 after earning close to 25%.
In contrast
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, the
shre
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share
 of
profits
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 of action,
drama
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, thrillers, and musicals all declined.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words profits, genres, adventure, drama, comedy, genre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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