You work for the Angus Hotel Group. There is a new position opening in your department. Write to your manager and apply for the job. In the letter, -Describe who you are and current role -Explain why you would like to apply for the new position -Suggest how the manager can assist with your application
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Dear Sir,
I hope you are doing well, I saw on Instagram there is open recruitment at your
departement
. I am Correct your spelling
department
wiriting
Correct your spelling
writing
this
letter to inform you that
some Change preposition
of
informations
all about me. Let me explain it.
I am Taufiqurrahman from Change the wording
information
pieces of information
lombok
close to the hotel, I am 23 years old. Currently Change the capitalization
Lombok
as
jobseeker and have a several of the experience at hotel Correct your spelling
a
as well as
a Housekeeping. During
working at the hotel previously there Change preposition
While
are
some activities Wrong verb form
were
that
related Correct pronoun usage
apply
with
Change preposition
to
this
position
The position is related with
my experience as a housekeepingChange preposition
to
before
. Rephrase
apply
Therefore
, I am very interesting
Replace the word
interested
to
Change preposition
in applying
apply
a job and I believe will Add the preposition
apply for
be
Verb problem
make
strong
contribution Correct article usage
a strong
with
the company. Change preposition
to
Furthemore
, I would like to develop my Correct your spelling
Furthermore
ability
at your company, Fix the agreement mistake
abilities
also
Correct word choice
and also
make
new experiences which is the most Verb problem
have
of
important for me.
Hopefully, you can be kind Change preposition
apply
to
Rephrase
enough to
receive
me to join Verb problem
invite
with
you and I hope in the future I will be useful, Change preposition
apply
that is
why you must consider due to
you need some employees that related
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are related
with
Change preposition
to
the a
position.
Thank you so much, I am looking forward to hearing you soon.
Yours Choose an article
the
a
Sircenly
LeviCorrect your spelling
Sincerely
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on
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Language
Make sure to proofread your text for spelling and grammatical errors. For instance, 'I am wiriting' should be 'I am writing', 'departement' should be 'department', and 'furthemore' should be 'furthermore'.
Tone
Your letter is clear, but try to maintain a formal tone throughout. Phrases like 'I hope you are doing well' can be replaced with something more professional like 'I hope this letter finds you well.'
Task Response
You have addressed all the required points, including your current role, reasons for applying, and how the manager can assist you.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your paragraphs are well-structured, each focusing on a distinct idea.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,