You work for the Angus Hotel Group. There is a new position opening in your department. Write to your manager and apply for the job. In the letter, -Describe who you are and current role -Explain why you would like to apply for the new position -Suggest how the manager can assist with your application

Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well, I saw on Instagram there is open recruitment at your
departement
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department
. I am
wiriting
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writing
this
letter to inform you
that
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some
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all about me. Let me explain it. I am Taufiqurrahman from
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close to the hotel, I am 23 years old. Currently
as
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jobseeker and have a several of the experience at hotel
as well as
a Housekeeping.
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working at the hotel previously there
are
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some activities
that
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related
with
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this
position The position is related
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my experience as a housekeeping
before
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.
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to
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in applying
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apply
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a job and I believe will
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strong
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contribution
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the company.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, I would like to develop my
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at your company,
also
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make
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new experiences which is the most
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important for me. Hopefully, you can be kind
to
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receive
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me to join
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you and I hope in the future I will be useful,
that is
why you must consider
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you need some employees that
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with
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the a
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position. Thank you so much, I am looking forward to hearing you soon. Yours
Sircenly
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Sincerely
Levi
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Language
Make sure to proofread your text for spelling and grammatical errors. For instance, 'I am wiriting' should be 'I am writing', 'departement' should be 'department', and 'furthemore' should be 'furthermore'.
Tone
Your letter is clear, but try to maintain a formal tone throughout. Phrases like 'I hope you are doing well' can be replaced with something more professional like 'I hope this letter finds you well.'
Task Response
You have addressed all the required points, including your current role, reasons for applying, and how the manager can assist you.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your paragraphs are well-structured, each focusing on a distinct idea.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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