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The given pie charts shows the proportion of British students able yo use languages other than english. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The given pie charts shows the proportion of British students able yo use languages other than english. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie
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diagram
diagrams
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 the proportion of six different groups of languages, except English ,spoken by
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UK learners in both 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 a number of Great Britain students speak
Spanish
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.
Moreover
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, a small number of
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students
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 tend to speak
two
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 other languages and
German
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 in the first year but in the second year, a few students used only English, French and
German
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.
To begin
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 with, the fraction of
Spanish
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language
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 in 2000 occupied a gigantic 30% followed by English only with a massive 20%.
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 percentages were seen in both another
language
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/French and
Two
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German
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 which represented a nominal 15% and a
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minuscule 10
% respectively. What is interesting to note is that the
another
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language
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 group was less than the
Spanish
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 by half. On the flip side, in the next ten years, the total of
Spanish
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, another
language
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 and
two
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 others,
each
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of
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them
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increased by 5%;
on the contrary
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, the no other
language
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 and French dropped by 5%.
In addition
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, the
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Germans
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 remained at the same
per cent
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percentage
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. What is surprising to see is the
another
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other
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langauge
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language
 was more than
German
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 by
two
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 times.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words spanish, two, german, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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