The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
The chart demonstrates the proportion of Australian males and females of different ages who had physical activities at regular intervals during the year 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
, except for the youngest
group
, women had more of that than men. Focusing on women, three
groups
showed a similar engagement: 35-44, 45-54, and 55-64 with approximately 53% of them doing regular exercise in 2001.
However
, the figure was lower in the 15-24 and 25-34
groups
, with well above 47% and near 49%, respectively. Importantly, those who engaged in
such
activities the least were from the 65-over
group
which accounted for 47% of the female population. Shifting the focus to men, the younger ones had the most physical participation with more than 52% of the population.
In contrast
, the least enthusiasm was credited to the 35-44
group
with a mere 39.5%. Surprisingly, the oldest age
group
had more physical engagement with more than 46%. The other three
groups
had approximately the same exercise rate around 44%. Comparing female and male physical activities, women were dominant in
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most of that in the majority of the
groups
excluding the youngest one.
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