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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts
compared
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compare
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 the proportion of finances
which
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apply
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spent on either
restaurant
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food
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 or home cooking during 30 years from 1970 to 2000,
while
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 the given line graph illustrates the amount of 2 different
meals
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 throughout the period.
Overall
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, as the
year
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 increased, more money was spent on
restaurant
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meals
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 rather than home-cooking
food
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.
Additionally
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, even though fast
food
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meals
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 saw a drop in
consumption
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 during the first 10 years, it was mostly consumed when compared to
restaurant
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meals
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 throughout the timeframe. With regards to the pie charts where the
food
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 budget spent on
restaurant
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meals
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 made up 10% in the
year
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 1980. As for the finances paid for the
restaurant
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food
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, it
then
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 rose up over 5 times from 10% to 50% in 2000, on par with the cost of cooking at home. Turning the focus on the line graph
which
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apply
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both fast
food
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 and
restaurant
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meals
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 saw an increase in
consumption
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, with 20
meals
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 per
year
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 each by 1980. In terms of the
consumption
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 of the
restaurant
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food
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, it went up gradually to nearly 45
meals
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 per
year
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 until the end of the period. Meanwhile,
consumed
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fast
food
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 surged to exceed
restaurant
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food
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consumption
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 at around 38
meals
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 per
year
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 between 1980 and 1990 before reaching the high of precisely 90
meals
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 per
year
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 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurant, food, meals, year, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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