The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table is a figure revealing data about the percentage of money which adults and
children
spent on 4 ordinary items( Food, Electronic equipment, Music
and Videos ) in the United Kingdom, by 2005.
Overall
, 3 groups ( Adults, Men and Women ) spent the most proportion of their budget on Food, while
Children
, Boys and Girls allocated more income on Music
.
Regarding the lowest income which Adults and Men spent, belonged to Videos, and as we see both of them spent just 2%, whereas
Women allocated much less, 0.5%. Similarly
, these 3 groups spent a lower income on Music
and Electronic equipment, just 4%, 5% and 2% on Music
, and 15%, 21% and 7% on Electronic equipment, respectively.
By contrast
, Children
, Boys and Girls allocated the lowest amount of their salary on
Food. Change preposition
to
Moreover
, Both Children
and Girls spent 11%, similarly
. and Boys spent just 9%.Submitted by pooya.olad on
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