The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs display how the UK's three common
names
of both males and females changed between 1925 to 2000. In general, the number of those popular
names
for each gender increased from just below 2 per
thousand
persons to the range between 10 to 12 in 2000. In terms of a
thousand
boys, Daniel was the most well-known name in 1925 by 4 as compared to the other two
names
. In 1950, Daniel and Oliver rose simultaneously to 10 and 5, respectively,
while
Alexander's popularity dropped slightly to 1.
Nevertheless
, people used fewer Oliver
names
to nearly zero and
conversely
had more Daniel and Alexander's
names
to 12 and almost 2 in 1975. All of those
names
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the same proportion as of 2000.
On the other hand
, the common
names
of girls were less fluctuate within the 1900s. In 1925-1975, Emily's name became more popular from just under 2 to almost 4 per
thousand
girls despite its tiny decrease to 1 per
thousand
females.
In contrast
, Sophia and Isabella's
names
were hovered by nearly zero during the same period of the rising popularity of Emily's
names
.
Finally
, all of those
names
rocketed to around 10 per
thousand
people by the end of the 1900s.
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