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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,
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The two charts indicate the percentage of
british
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British
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students
 at a certain University who can speak languages other than English in 2000 and 2010. As a whole, the main feature is that the
students
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number of students
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 who speak other than Spanish, French, and German and who speak only Spanish increased from 2000 to 2010
while
 the
students
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number of students
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 who can speak only French or only English decreased during the same period of time.
First,
the proportion of those who can manipulate more than two
lauguages
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languages
 or who can speak only German has no change between 2000 and 2010, staying at 10 %.
Second,
the
students
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number of students
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 who can speak only Spanish or who can speak two languages has raised its rate by 5 % until 2010.
On the other hand
, the
students
effecient
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efficient
 at only French rated up to 15 % in 2000,
whereas
 they
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rated
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 only 10 % in 2010.
Similarly
, the
students
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ability
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the ability
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of speaking
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to speak
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 only English occupied 20 % in 2000, which
consists
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consisted
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only
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of only
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 10 % of the all in 2010.
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