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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,
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Given is a pie chart depicting the proportional representation of college
students
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 who can speak second languages in 2000 and 2010. It is evident Spanish was the most popular language in both years.
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, there were more and more bilingual
students
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,
while
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 the proportion of youngsters speaking French only decreased during
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 ten-year period. As can be seen in the graph,
students
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 who can only speak German or two other languages remained constant at 10% during the period in question.
On the other hand
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, college
students
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 using another language rose 5% from 2000 to 2010.
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, the Spanish group
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 grew from 30% to 35% in these ten years. There is an opposite trend in French and
students
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 cannot use another language. Youngsters can speak French only diminished from 15% in 200 to 10% in 2010. At the same time, the proportion of youngsters using English in college dwindled dramatically to half in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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