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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison
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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of British
students
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 at one university in England who spoke
other
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another language
other languages
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language
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besides
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 English, in the year
of
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apply
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2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in both years many
students
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 were able to use another
language
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,
although
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 there were
students
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 who were only able to speak one
language
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. In 2000, Spanish was the most spoken
language
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 that British
Students
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 use which was 30% of the charts.
Additionally
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, there were 15%
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students
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of students
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 who can speak French, followed by 10% of German
language
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speaker
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speakers
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. Ten years later, in 2010 the percentage of
students
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 who speak Spanish
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increased to 35%.
However
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, those who were able to speak French was decreased to 10%.
Interestengly
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Interestingly
, there was
also
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 an increasing percentage of 5% from 15% in 2000 of an unidentified
language
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • converse
  • additional languages
  • language proficiency
  • monolingual
  • multilingualism
  • proficient
  • trend
  • significant changes
  • decade
  • notable increase
  • commonly spoken
  • comparison
  • data reveal
  • observed
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