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The line charts indicate how the number of train passengers varied in an unspecified geographical location, as well as revealing the proportion of trains running punctually compared to the fixed target of 95%. All the statistics are recorded for the period from 2000 to 2009. From a quick glance, the number of train passengers underwent considerable fluctuation, reaching a peak in 2005. Meanwhile, the rate of trains running on time shared the same statistical progression, meeting or exceeding the target from 2002 to 2005 and again from 2008 to 2009. In 2000, the number of travelers using trains was 37 million, climbing to around 42 million before dropping to just below its starting number in 2003. During the next years, train passengers rose sharply and hit the most significant peak of around 47 million in 2005; afterwards, the figure was somewhat unsteady, ending up staying at around 43 million at the end of the period. In terms of running time efficiency, the rate stood at 92% within the year 2000, subsequently amounting to an adequate 95% in 2002. In the later years, the proportion of on-time trains exceeded the set target when the rate was 96% in 2004, but later declined notably by 4% in 2006. However, the percentage of punctual trains went up gradually and eventually stabilized at 97%.

The line charts indicate how the number of train passengers varied in an unspecified geographical location, as well as revealing the proportion of trains running punctually compared to the fixed target of 95%. All the statistics are recorded for the period from 2000 to 2009. From a quick glance, the number of train passengers underwent considerable fluctuation, reaching a peak in 2005. Meanwhile, the rate of trains running on time shared the same statistical progression, meeting or exceeding the target from 2002 to 2005 and again from 2008 to 2009. In 2000, the number of travelers using trains was 37 million, climbing to around 42 million before dropping to just below its starting number in 2003. During the next years, train passengers rose sharply and hit the most significant peak of around 47 million in 2005; afterwards, the figure was somewhat unsteady, ending up staying at around 43 million at the end of the period. In terms of running time efficiency, the rate stood at 92% within the year 2000, subsequently amounting to an adequate 95% in 2002. In the later years, the proportion of on-time trains exceeded the set target when the rate was 96% in 2004, but later declined notably by 4% in 2006. However, the percentage of punctual trains went up gradually and eventually stabilized at 97%.
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The line charts indicate how the
number
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 of train passengers varied in an unspecified geographical location,
as well as
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 revealing the proportion of
trains
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 running punctually compared to the fixed target of 95%. All the statistics are recorded for the period from 2000 to 2009. From a quick glance, the
number
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 of train passengers underwent considerable fluctuation, reaching a peak in 2005. Meanwhile, the rate of
trains
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 running on time shared the same statistical progression, meeting or exceeding the target from 2002 to 2005 and again from 2008 to 2009. In 2000, the
number
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 of
travelers
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 using
trains
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 was 37
million
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, climbing to around 42
million
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 before dropping to just below its starting
number
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 in 2003. During the next years, train passengers rose sharply and hit the most significant peak of around 47
million
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 in 2005; afterwards, the figure was somewhat unsteady, ending up staying at around 43
million
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at the end
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 of the period. In terms of running time efficiency, the rate stood at 92% within the year 2000,
subsequently
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 amounting to an adequate 95% in 2002. In the later years, the proportion of on-time
trains
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 exceeded the set target when the rate was 96% in 2004, but later declined notably by 4% in 2006.
However
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, the percentage of punctual
trains
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 went up gradually and eventually stabilized at 97%

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