The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the export
earnings
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of one country in different categories during
2015and
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2015 and
2016.
Th e
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The
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table gives information about the percentage change in values by different exporting categories in 2016
comparing
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compared
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with 2015. We could easily
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find
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that
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except
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the Gems and jewellery,the
earnings
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of the other categories were all rising.The
earnings
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of Petroleum
products
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and Engineered goods were highest
while
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Agricultural
products
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and Textiles were least. Petroleum
products
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and
the
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apply
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Engineered goods were rising,and
the
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their
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earnings
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of
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apply
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them
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were both over 60
billions
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billion
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.The Agricultural
products
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were
also
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increasing slightly,
earned
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earning
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about 30
billions
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billion
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.The Textiles
was
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were
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lowest
at
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in
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2015,but it becoming higher and
which
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apply
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beyond The
earnings
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of Agricultural
products
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.
The
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apply
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Gems and jewellery were the only
one
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apply
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category that was decreased,but
its
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their
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earnings
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still more than 40
billions
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billion
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. From the table we
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can
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see the biggest
changes
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change
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was the Textiles,15.24% higher than
2015
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in 2015
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,
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,
was
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the engineered goods,increasing 8.5%.Petroleum
products
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and Agricultural
products
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were
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apply
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also
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increased,but slightly
for
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by
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3% and 0.81%
while
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Gems and jewellery
was
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apply
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dropped
for
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by
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5.18%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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