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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two line graphs
shows
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show
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 the amount of New Zealand imports from
Japan
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 and Australia between 1994
until
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and
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 2004.
Overall
Linking Words
, the chart describes changes over
ten-year
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a ten-year
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 period, with a contrast between those two countries
are
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apply
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Australia showing an increase,
while
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Japan
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 showing a decrease. From the beginning period,
on
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in
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 1994, the Import of Australia and
Japan
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 only
takes
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took
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NZ
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$ 1000
million
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 difference with
Japan
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 is slightly lower,
in contrast
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on
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in
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 2004 it shows
the
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a
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different
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difference
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around
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of around
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NZ
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$ 6000
million
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.
Then
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, on the journey, both countries
has
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have
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 the same level amount of imports between 1997 to 1998 and 1999 to 2000 for around 5000
million
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NZ
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 dollars.
Linking Words
Moreover
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Moreover,
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on
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in
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1997
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1997,
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 The
land
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Land
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 of the
rising sun
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Rising Sun
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 reach
their
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its
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 highest import to New Zealand for 6000
million
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NZ
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 dollars.
Whereas
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, the country of
kangaroo
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Kangaroo
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reach
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reached
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 their highest Import
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 with 8000
NZ
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 dollars,
on
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in
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 the same year
of
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apply
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Japan
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shows
Wrong verb form
showed
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their
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 lowest imports.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, nz, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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