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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two line graphs
shows
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show
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 the amount of New Zealand imports from
Japan
 and Australia between 1994
until
Correct word choice
and
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 2004.
Overall
, the chart describes changes over
ten-year
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a ten-year
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 period, with a contrast between those two countries
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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Australia showing an increase,
while
Japan
 showing a decrease. From the beginning period,
on
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in
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 1994, the Import of Australia and
Japan
 only
takes
Wrong verb form
took
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NZ
$ 1000
million
 difference with
Japan
 is slightly lower,
in contrast
on
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in
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 2004 it shows
the
Correct article usage
a
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different
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difference
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around
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of around
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NZ
$ 6000
million
.
Then
, on the journey, both countries
has
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have
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 the same level amount of imports between 1997 to 1998 and 1999 to 2000 for around 5000
million
NZ
 dollars.
Moreover
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Moreover,
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on
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in
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1997
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1997,
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 The
land
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Land
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 of the
rising sun
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Rising Sun
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 reach
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 highest import to New Zealand for 6000
million
NZ
 dollars.
Whereas
, the country of
kangaroo
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Kangaroo
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reach
Wrong verb form
reached
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 their highest Import
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 with 8000
NZ
 dollars,
on
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in
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 the same year
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
Japan
shows
Wrong verb form
showed
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their
Correct pronoun usage
its
show examples
 lowest imports.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, nz, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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