The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The represented bar illustrates the percentage of people, who regularly do exercises
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age
and gender in Australia in 2010.
It’s evident to observe the interesting pattern that in almost all of the presented life groups, women seem to be more active than men. The only exception from that is
in the age
15 to 24 bracket. One of the possible explanations of this
might be the fact that at this
time, most of the males don’t have any big responsibilities. They have a lot of both energy and time to do physical exercises or workouts at the gym.
When over the age
of 25 men’s activity drastically drops even to 39.5 percent
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the group 35 to 44, the Change preposition
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female’s
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females
increases
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increase
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group 45 to 54. This
might be the result of the trend that they usually pick less physically engaging occupations and also
women are generally more aware of their health.
The confirmation of this
theory may be observed in the 65 and over age
category, where the numbers between genders are almost the same, with only 0.4
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percent
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This
is the retirement age
for many males, which leads them to be more willing to do exercises.Submitted by piotrsmolik on
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