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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

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The bar chart here illustrates the portion of the Gross Domestic Product, spent towards
health
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 from 2002 to 2012 in
5 year
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5-year
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 intervals, by the European
contires
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countries
 of Belgium, Denmark, Estonia, France, Lithuania, Luxembourg, Netherlands, Norway, Poland, Slovenia, Spain and Switzerland. To summarise, Switzerland,
besides
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 France, had the highest
health
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 expenditure in all three years, France spent
highest
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the highest
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 in the year
of
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apply
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2007.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the lowest was spent by Estonia in all three years. The countries which increased
health
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spendings
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spending
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 are
,
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 Denmark, Lithuania, Norway, Poland and Slovenia. Denmark was at above 8% in 2002,
2007
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and 2007
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 and increased to 10% by 2012. Lithuania increased to 6%, Norway
upto
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up to
 8%, Poland around 6% and Slovenia was more than 8% in 2012. The countries
who
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that
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 dropped their
health
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expances
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expenses
expanses
 are
,
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apply
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 Luxembourg and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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. Luxembourg spent 8% in 2002 and 2007, but spent below 8% in 2012. Nether l

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • Percentage increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Fluctuation
  • Economic factors
  • Healthcare priorities
  • Public spending
  • Comparative analysis
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