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The table shows the proportion of women in the labour force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of women in the labour force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the fraction of women in the
work
 pool and in the supervision in 5 various nations.
Overall
, ladies
in
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doing physical
work
 is much more than the operational
work
.
In addition
, Australia and
United
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the United
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 States have almost equal
number
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numbers
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 of women
involves
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involved
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 in both
force
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forces
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. To commence with, Australia has 42%
as
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in
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 labour and 43% in management
work
 but
in contrast
, Egypt has half the numbers
that is
 20% in
previous
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the previous
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 and 12% in
latter
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the latter
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 one.
However
, in Sri
Lanka
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Lanka,
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 women who are engaged in manpower are much higher in number which is 42% and
operational
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the operational
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 section
contain
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contains
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very
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a very
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less
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low
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 ratio
as
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of
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 9%.
Moreover
, Japan and
United
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the United
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 States probably have the same percentage of working force which are greater
as
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apply
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nearly 46 to 48% but in
managing
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the managing
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 field, the number has
been
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apply
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changed, as for Japan it is 17% and for
USA
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the USA
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 it is 43%.
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