The diagrams below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how us used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how us used to produce concrete for building purposes. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures illustrate the
step
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of
the
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apply
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cement
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production and concrete production and
also
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the ingredients which are used in each
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and the equipment
what
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that
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are help
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the process. First of all, as
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step limestone and clay are crushed by using a crusher and powdered
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ingredients.
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, the powder
entered
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a mixer mixed well and
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through a
cylinderical
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cylindrical
rotating heater via a bent tube.
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, the heated components
falls
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into a grinder
and
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grinds the elements and the final product is
cement
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.
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bags the
cement
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for manufacture
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, 15% of packed
cement
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mixed
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with 10% of water, 25% of sand and 50% of gravel which is
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small stones, into a huge concrete mixer and mixed well to produce concrete for construction purposes. Components which are used for
cement
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making and the produced
cement
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and what are the ingenious for concrete production are shown the both diagrams.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement with synonyms.
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