Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter •tell them when you will be arriving and leaving •explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost •ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel

Dear sir/madam I would like to inform you that,I
wants
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to book
hotel
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a hotel
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room for
3days
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3 days
.Because I have some VVIP
guest
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guests
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and I need some arrangements as well. On
27th
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the 27th
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July
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of July
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morning
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morning,
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we will reach there,and we will vacate the rooms on
30th
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the 30th
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July
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of July
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.We want
pool
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a pool
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villa and the room should
be decorate
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be decorated
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with flowers .
Moreover
,we need candle
light
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candlelight
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dinner on
28th
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the 28th
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.kindly arrange a music system for us.I need some information about weekend tariff for
further
procedure.
Besides
that ,could I get some details regarding the entertainment activities
.
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?
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I
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I am
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interested
to play
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in playing
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tennicort
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tennis
.If it is possible kindly arrange
this
for us,and we need
foods
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food
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that I can pay
along with
our room charges.
Is
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Are
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any tourist places available
nearby
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near
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your hotel ?
This
is the first time
iam
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I am
visiting your hotel.Hope you can
do
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make
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better arrangements for us and you will provide detailed information regarding the amount, activities and some exciting places. Thanking you
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task achievement
Your letter covers most of the necessary points, but it would benefit from more detailed information about the type of room and specific activities you are interested in. Consider revising sentences like 'kindly arrange a music system for us' to be clearer and more specific.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your letter could be improved by logically organizing your requests and information. For example, group all room-related requests together and all activity-related requests together. This will make your letter easier to follow.
language accuracy
There are several grammatical errors that need attention, such as 'I wants' should be 'I want' and 'I interested to play tennicort' should be 'I am interested in playing tennis.' Pay attention to verb tense and agreement to improve clarity.
greeting and closing
You have a polite greeting and closing, which is important in formal letter writing.
task achievement
Your letter includes a request for specific arrangements (pool villa, flower decorations, candlelight dinner), which shows you are thinking in detail about your stay.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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