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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart provides key information about the number of males and females in
further
 education in England in three different periods and the nature of their studying whether it is part-time or full-time. The units are measured in thousands.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the amount of women students was the largest in the 1990s.
In addition
, the number of
the
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men
was
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fluctuated over the years,
whereas
 the figures
of
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for
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 female students grew gradually over the
periods
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period
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.
According to
 what is shown, the male pupils who were studying
in
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part-time were one thousand in
1970s
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the 1970s
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.
Subsequently
, it dropped to 850
student
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students
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 in
1980s
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the 1980s
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.
Then
, it rose a little reaching 900. In terms of
full time
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full-time
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, both male and female Pupils had the lowest amount of enrolled students.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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