The graph shows the amount earned graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the amount earned graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The visual illustrates the number of incomes in 2002 between 3 categories who are graduate,postgraduate and
others
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different ages in every week.The biggest amount of
earning
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money was approximately 850pond in 36-40 years old in
others
group. The amount
of
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earned between all
of
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3 groups from 21-25 and 31-35 moved
increasly
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increasingly
from
aproximately
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approximately
350
until
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450 to nearly 600 and 700
pond
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in
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each week,
also
there was a boom in
others
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other
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categori
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categories
in
age
36-40 more than 800
pond
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. The number of income in Higher degree shooted nearly 750
pond
anbut
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but
first degree just has an
increace
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increase
increased
in36 to 40
ageness
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ages
ageless
near 700
pond
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. There was a
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fluctuate
in other groups in
age
31-35 to 46-50 in
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gegree
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degree
. The amount of earning money had
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a decrease
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decrease
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in both groups which were
others
and Higer
degreein
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degree in
age
41-45 in Highers decreased from 810 to 710 and
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decreace
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decrease
had
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countinues
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continued
to less than 700 in ages 56-60,
also
the Highers were the same in
age
41-45 to 51-55 but they had an
increace
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increase
in
age
56-60 by nearly 800
pond
incomes every week.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words others, pond, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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