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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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France's
energy
 manufacturing
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 2 years in 1995, and 2005. The most significant features are these two types of
energy
, including coal and
petro
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petrol
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were
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 the major production of France throughout a 2-year period. The percentage of coal construction was slightly between 30% and 31%,
while
petro products
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petroproducts
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 decreased steadily from roughly
one third
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 to
one fifth
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. Parallelly, there was a noticeable stability in the amount of gas to
stay
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 constant at 30%. The other
energy
manufactures
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manufacturers
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 were divided between a small amount of nuclear and other. Nuclear continued to grow from 6% in 1995 to 10% in 2005.
In addition
 to other
energy
 sources, they climbed minimally from 5 % to 9%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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