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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter •explain what has happened •describe the bag and its contents •say what you would like them to do about this problem You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam,
This
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 is to inform you that I was travelling
previous
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the previous
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 week on flight Airbus - 250 from Paris to London,
where
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and
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 I
forgot
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left
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 my
bag
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in
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 the plane.
While
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 commuting, I placed my
bag
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 beneath my seat as there was minimal space
in
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on
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 the
airplane
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aeroplane
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 deck. When I reached my hotel, I was shocked to realize that I misplaced it
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 the plane. I was carrying a black leather
bag
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 with silver strips on it. The size of the
bag
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 is small
which
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it
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 contains my
personnel
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 belongings like
driving
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my driving
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 license, phone charger and some cosmetics products. I would like you to help me return it at the earliest as I am dependent on
few
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a few
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 items present in it. If you need any other information regarding my
bag
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then
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 I can provide you
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 details. I would like you to coordinate with the lost and found department to identify my
bag
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. With the description provided above, if you find my
bag
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,
then
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 I would request you to reach me on my cell - +12423534443. I hope you will promptly take
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the required
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 actions. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Justina Marcella

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task achievement
Make sure to specify the flight number accurately, as 'Airbus - 250' does not seem like a typical flight number. It could be confused with the aircraft type.
coherence cohesion
Consider restructuring the second paragraph for better clarity. For example, 'The bag I left behind is a small black leather bag with silver strips. It contains my personal belongings such as my driving license, phone charger, and some cosmetic products.'
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is courteous and respectful, which is appropriate for a formal letter to an airline.
greeting and closing
The closing of the letter is polite and reiterates the urgency of the matter effectively.
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