The line graph shows value changes in the UK steel industry between 1970 and 2000, while the second line chart shows employment status in the same industry.

The line graph shows value changes in the UK steel industry between 1970 and 2000, while the second line chart shows employment status in the same industry.
The
first
line graph illustrates the changes in the value of the
UK
steel industry over a
period
from 1970 to 2000,
while
the second line graph depicts employment status in the same industry.  
Overall
, in the
first
chart, it is notable that the trend for total
UK
demand and
UK
production witnessed downward trends throughout the
period
,
while
the reverse is true for the trend for imports.
Additionally
, in the second chart,
it is clear that
the work status decreased over the
period
.   Regarding the figures in the
first
diagram, in the
first
year, the value of total
UK
demand was the highest at 200.000,
whereas
the value of
UK
production was 170.000 and that of Import was 7.000.
Then
, the figures for total
UK
demand and
UK
production went down significantly in the rest of the
period
, ending the
period
with 100.000 and 80.000 respectively,
while
the trend for imports went up strikingly throughout the
period
, reaching 78.000
at the end
of the
period
.   When it comes to the rate of job status in the
UK
steel industry, it started at 50.000 in 1970 and decreased noticeably throughout the
period
. In 2000, it ended the
period
at around 18.000.
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