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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two
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line graphs illustrate the differences
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 New
Zealand
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exports
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 from
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 from 1994 to 2004. As is observed,
Australia
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's
exports
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 to New
Zealand
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 dramatically
upsurged
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increased
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while
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Japan
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's
export
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exports
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 to New
Zealand
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 rapidly declined. In general,
Australia
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's
exports
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 began uplifting between 1994 and 1996
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 slumped in the following year. In 2003, imports from
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 increasing 8000
million
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dollars
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,
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 imports from
Japan
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 experienced a
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peak of
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 8000
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dollars
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 in 1996, followed by a significant decrease to about 2000
million
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dollars
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 by 2004. In 1999, both countries reached their lowest import levels.
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Japan
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exports
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export
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 figures slightly decreased and reached a low point of 2000
million
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dollars
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 respectively.
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,
Japan
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also
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 performed well in
this
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 period, exporting 6000
million
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dollars
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 worth of
good
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goods
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 to New
Zealand
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, exports, australia, japan, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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