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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time
The three pie charts
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 illustrate the expenditure by local authorities in Someland in different years: 1980, 1990 and 2000.
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 local
government
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 of all
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prefered
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preferred
 educational spending
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to other types of expenses.
For
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 capital outlays for Education
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 1990
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 nearly half of the budget and in the years 1980 and 2000 it was 35 and 40 per cent respectively.
In addition
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, Education is not the only major sphere of expenditure. Civic authorities gave proper
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consideration
 to K-12 education too. In 1980th it showed just over a quarter of
spendings
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 and in the years 1990 and 2000th it was still
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one of the major costs.
Comparing
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 to 1990 when
a
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 cost of Health and Human resources where
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5
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per cent, in 2000-th it decreased to 10 per cent

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