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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time
#line #books #four #months #village #libraries #percentages #type #time
On the line
graph
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 we can
can
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see the number of
books
 borrowed from four village libraries in different months in 2014. More
books
 were borrowed in West Eaton in August and
September
 than in
June
 .
Also
 ,in Church Mount were more borrowed in
September
 than in July and
June
 .In Ryeslip were more borrowed in
June
 than in
September
.
Then
 ,in Sutton Wood
books
 were more borrowed in July and
September
.
However
,in
this
 village
books
 were borrowed less in August .
How
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As
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 we can see,in
June
 compared to
September
 readers borrowed fewer
books
 .
In contrast
,readers from Ryeslip borrowed more
books
 in
June
 than in
September
 So,
according to
 the line graph , the number of
books
 borrowed depends on the time of the year . The pie chart
consists
Verb problem
shows
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of
Correct article usage
the of
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 percentage
more
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preferred
type
Fix the agreement mistake
types
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 of
books
 . Slightly less than half of people(45%)prefer fiction.19 % of people
borrows
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borrow
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a
Correct article usage
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biography
books
 .Only 19% of people
borrows
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borrow
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self-helps
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self-help
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books
 .And
then
 , the same number of
books
 of two types , history and science were borrowed (14%).
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, september, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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