You bought a TV a week ago but when you got home you discovered it did not work properly. You called customer service to report the problem but you have not yet received any help. Write a letter to the company and in your letter. *introduce yourself *explain the problem *and state what action you would like from the company

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
letter to complain about the
TV
that bought from your store. At the weekend I often prefer to stay at home
while
this
Change preposition
during this
show examples
period of time I always play video
game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
show examples
, in
this
game there
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
plenty of
advertisement
Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
show examples
and I found one of your
TV
commercial
Fix the agreement mistake
commercials
show examples
interesting and
also
friend
Add an article
a friend
show examples
of mine suggested
me
Correct pronoun usage
I
show examples
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
show examples
purchase
new
Add an article
a new
show examples
type of
TV
from your store.
Therefore
, those recommendations made me
to
Change the verb form
apply
show examples
buy
this
new television. When I got
this
tv
to
Change preposition
at
show examples
home it was completely new and it had no
any
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
problem at all.
However
, after two weeks The
TV
began to malfunction.
Moreover
, I called your
costumer
Correct your spelling
customer
show examples
service, but I could not manage to connect to your operator. I want to refund all the money I spent on your
TV
not only the money was the problem, but
also
I was humiliated by your operator for hanging up
phone
Add an article
the phone
show examples
on me. I hope you can take
few
Correct article usage
a few
show examples
steps to how to treat a customer and I wish your store
include
Wrong verb form
included
show examples
insurance for your products. Yours faithfully, Ozodbek
Submitted by omondavlat91 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Ensure that the introduction includes your identity and the purchase details as well, such as the date of purchase and the product model.
coherence cohesion
Provide a clearer timeline and structure to your letter by separating the sections more distinctly, for instance, having a separate paragraph for the initial problem and subsequent follow-up actions.
coherence cohesion
Good attempt at structuring the letter with a proper greeting and closing. This adds to the formality and appropriateness of the complaint letter.
task achievement
The letter clearly communicates the main issue and the action you are seeking from the company, displaying a good understanding of task response requirements.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: