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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#minutes #week #flight #london #plane #bag #hotel #airline #contents #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I forgot to take my
bag
from
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off
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 the plane when I travelled to London
in
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on
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 your
airlines
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airline
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last
 week. I did not remember about the
bag
 until I
reach
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 the hotel. I had an important meeting to attend in a couple of hours after I landed in London. So, I was rushing to leave the plane as soon as possible. In that hurry, I did not remember to take my
bag
. It is a red
color
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 shoulder
bag
 from
Samsonite
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the Samsonite
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 brand.
Although
 it did not have any costlier items
but
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it has my iPad and my favorite brown leather jacket. I really do not want to miss these two items.
Therefore
, I request you to find my
bag
 and hand it over to the lost and found place
in
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 the airport. I will collect it from them by completing all the verification procedures. I highly appreciate your support. Yours Faithfully, Srini
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-structured, but be sure to check for subject-verb agreement and minor grammatical errors to improve clarity.
task achievement
Your response is thorough but could benefit from slightly more detail about the flight itself, such as the flight number or the date of travel.
coherence cohesion
Clear structure with appropriate greeting and closing.
task achievement
Polite and formal tone, appropriate for the context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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