You live in a small university town.Last week,you drove to a big city about two hours away to buy a new laptop at a good price.You worked on the laptop all week and finished writing a long assignment that is due shortly. However,this week,the laptop doesn't even switch on.Write to the store.In your letter: #Tell the store where you live & what happened #Explain the problem with the laptop #State what action you would like the store to take

Dear Sir or Mada My name is John Smith, a faithful customer who has been
shoping
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shopping
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2 years.I am writing
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laptop
which I have bought from your shop at Samarqand. I got the latest version of
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which
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fully paid for on
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of May.
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problem which I
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faced but did not
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attention
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the screen was blurry.
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after using the
laptop
for
week
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a week
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it did not even switch on.I was assured that
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version of
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the laptop
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been broken.I quickly called for customer service to report and I was put on hold incessantly.
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visited
the and was promised a technician who would come come check my
laptop
, but I have still not been attended to. It's been 2 weeks now and
this
action is totally unacceptable and abhorrent. I demand a quick refund or a replacement of the
laptop
by the company as soon as possible or I will take legal action. I look forward to hearing from you within a week. Yours faithfully, John Smith
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task achievement
Be sure to proofread your letter for minor errors, such as spelling and grammar mistakes, to improve clarity and professionalism.
coherence cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly by using separate paragraphs for different points. This adds to the clarity and coherence of your letter.
task achievement
You provided a clear description of the problem with the laptop and explained the situation logically.
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You used a professional tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for this type of formal complaint.
coherence cohesion
Your letter includes a greeting and a closing, which adds to the overall structure and formality.
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