The charts beloow show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak othe languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts beloow show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak othe languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts depict the percentages of British college
students
who were able to speak other
languages
despite
of
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English, observed in one
univerity
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university
in England, over a period of 10 years from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
,
Spanish
was the second
languages
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language
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students
can
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use after English,
while
students
who
able
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were able
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to
spoke
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speak
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Germany
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German
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and two other
languages
had the lowest percentages over a decade of period.
According to
the data, in the
innitial
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initial
year, most
of
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university
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the university
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students
mainly spoke
Spanish
as their second
language
with
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a percentage
the percentage
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at
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of
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30%,
then
rose
5
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to 5
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%
in
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the
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10 years later.
Likewise
Spanish
,
students
who were able to speak another
language
also
increased in the same proportion
such
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Spanish
.
On the other hand
, university
students
who can
spoke
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speak
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French and no other
language
,
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witnessed
decline
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a decline
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at 10% and 5% respectively, and reached 10% for both
ability
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abilities
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.
However
, since the first
of
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the
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stage, the rates of university
students
who can
spoke
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speak
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two other
languages
and German remained stable
along
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for
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a tenth of
century
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a century
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.
To conclude
,
students
who were able to speak
Spanish
and
another
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another language
other languages
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languages
improved
5
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by 5
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%, and
Spanish
marked
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was marked
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as the second
languages
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language
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that
students
can
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could
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use after English.
In contrast
with
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students
who
unable
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were unable
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to
spoke
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speak
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any other
language
, German, French, other
languages
had the same proportions at 10%.
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