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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar chart illustrated shows how much money
britsh citizins
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British citizens
 spend on fast food per week,
while
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 the line graph provided below states the trends
of
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in
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 fast food consumption. In general, looking at the bar chart there is a high level in
high income
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high-income
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 consumers at just above 40
pences
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pence
pieces
 in a week with hamburgers compared to the
low income
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low-income
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 consumers at about 14. Moving on to the line graph below it is shown how many grammes have been consumed in the past 4 decades ranging from 1970-1990 with yet again a sharp increase with hamburgers, compared to the Fish and Chips
having
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 a
more slowwer
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 decrease with
fluctation
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fluctuation
fluctuations
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Fast food
  • Income groups
  • High-income
  • Low-income
  • Medium-income
  • Hamburgers
  • Fried chicken
  • Fish & chips
  • Consumption
  • Trends
  • Significant increase
  • Decline
  • Popularity
  • Spending patterns
  • Consumption trends
  • Lifestyle
  • Preferences
  • Prices
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