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The figures give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The figures give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the level of figure economic growth,
also
 the pie chart shows the proportion breakdown of
household
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households
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 by expenditure between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, payment starts increasing activity,
then
it’s
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it
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fluctuating
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fluctuates
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over
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apply
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several times .
Moreover
,
it’s
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it
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begin
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 reducing higher, but the paying out again declined.
As well
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,housing and
foods
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food
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 were the most significant spending than others .
To begin
 with, the amount of extension
starts
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started
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 enhancing from scratch in 1995.
However
, the levels of growth stayed the same in several times.In 2005 years
it’s
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it
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 improved
for
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by
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 five.
Then
 in five years ,
it’s
 dwindled
for
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to
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 -5. After a few times ,
figure
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the figure
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 starts enriching once more.
In
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At
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 the end of 2010
years
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years,
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it’s
also
 getting under way become greater.
Furthermore
 , there are the biggest major investments for housing , meals and others.
For example
 , around 1995 to 2000 the number of
spending
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food
devolved
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decreased
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 more than before.
In addition
, the numerous of clothing,travel and others complied a small value .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words it’s with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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