The figures give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The figures give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of categories.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting  the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the level of figure economic growth,
also
the pie chart shows the proportion breakdown of
household
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households
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by expenditure between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, payment starts increasing activity,
then
it’s
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it
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fluctuating
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fluctuates
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over
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apply
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several times .
Moreover
,
it’s
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it
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begin
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began
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reducing higher, but the paying out again declined.
As well
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,housing and
foods
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food
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were the most significant spending than others .
To begin
with, the amount of extension
starts
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started
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enhancing from scratch in 1995.
However
, the levels of growth stayed the same in several times.In 2005 years
it’s
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it
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improved
for
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by
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five.
Then
in five years ,
it’s
dwindled
for
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to
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-5. After a few times ,
figure
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the figure
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starts enriching once more.
In
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the end of 2010
years
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years,
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it’s
also
getting under way become greater.
Furthermore
, there are the biggest major investments for housing , meals and others.
For example
, around 1995 to 2000 the number of
spending
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food
devolved
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decreased
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more than before.
In addition
, the numerous of clothing,travel and others complied a small value .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words it’s with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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