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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs depict how New Zealand’s non-domestic commodities vary in two different countries which are Japan and Australia throughout the one-decade period.
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,it is obvious that New Zealand has acquired the highest sales of imported goods to Australia compared to Japan in the early 21st century. The outcome of importing things to Australia stood at $NZD 4000
million
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.The
imports
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 have remained stable between 1994 and 1996. In 1996, it showed a substantial increase of approximately $
NZ
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 2500
million
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. From 1996 to 1997, the
imports
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 fluctuated wildly and hit the lowest point of $
NZ
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 3000
million
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 over the two-year period.In the span of almost 2 years, the sales acquired the highest value amounted to $
NZ
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 7000
million
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.The
imports
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 have mitigated a variation of sales for the rest of the timeframe and
reach
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 a plateau of $
NZ
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 8000
million
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 . The exports to one of the countries in Asia continent begin at $
NZ
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 3000
million
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.From 1994 to 1997, the non-domestic commodities
shown
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showed
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 a dramatic surge in money obtained by just over $
NZ
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 3000
million
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.
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, the
imports
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 have represented
steady
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a steady
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 fall from approximately $
NZ
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 6000
million
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 to $
NZ
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 3000
million
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. The values continued to fluctuate until 2001. For the rest of the period, the money obtained hit
the
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rock bottom at $
NZ
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 2000
million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, imports, nz with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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