The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture illustrates the
number
of males and females that passed the driving
test
in a
spesific
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specific
Asian country from 1980 to 2010. From the data, there was an
increase
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trend in both
women
and
men
who passed the driving
test
from 1980 to 2000.
However
, there was a decline in the
number
of
women
and there was a stagnant in the
number
of
men
who passed the driving
test
in 2010. It can
also
be seen that the percentage of
women
who passed the driving
test
were
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was
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higher than
the
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that
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men
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of men
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. In 1980, there were nearly 50%
women
that passed the
test
. The
number
kept
increased
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until 2000, where there were nearly 70% of females passed the
test
. In
contarst
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contrast
, only less than 30%
men
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of men
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had
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passed the
test
in 1980.
Although
, like the
women
, the
number
of
men
that
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who
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passed the driving
test
was increasing, it was still less than the percentage of
women
that
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who
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passed the same
test
. In conclusion,
although
there was an increasing trend in both
men
and
women
who passed the driving
test
they took, the percentage of
women
still
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was still
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higher than
the
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that
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men
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of men
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, test, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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