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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The two line graphs depict data regarding New Zealand
import
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imports
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 from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.
Overall
,
imports
 from Australia
has
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have
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 shown
increase
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an increase
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 since the start of
period
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the period
a period
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, with
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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 of
trend
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the trend
a trend
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 by
dip
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a dip
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 down in the middle, even though it has
raised
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risen
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 at
end
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the end
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.
Although
,
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apply
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Imports
 from Japan
has
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apply
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showed
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a comparetively
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comparetively
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comparatively
 similar trend at
start
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the start
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,
it
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they
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 decreased sharply
begining
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beginning
of
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in
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 2000 until
further
.
To begin
 with, Australian
imports
has
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have
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showed
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shown
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 a steady increase since 1994.
This
 started nearly at
NZ
 $ 4000
million
,
then
 rose sharply until
in
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apply
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1996, at which point that
dip
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dipped
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 dramatically with almost
a
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apply
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half-way
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halfway
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 from
NZ
 $6500 to 3000
million
 in 1999. It escalated dramatically
afterward
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afterwards
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, and it
peak
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peaks
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NZ
 $8000
millon
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million
 in 2004 with
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a substanial
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substanial decrese
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substantial decrease
 in 2002.
In contrast
, New Zealand
imports
 began the period at
NZ
 $3000
million
 and showed a rose sharply,
then
purpassed
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passed
NZ
 $6000
million
 in
middle
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the middle
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 of
year
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the year
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 1997, which became continuel fluctuation between 1997 and 2000. Even if
this
 trend reached
to
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apply
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NZ
 $6000
million
 point, it fell markedly until
next
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the next
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 four years duration in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words imports, nz, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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