You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The two line graphs depict data regarding New Zealand
import
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imports
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from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.
Overall
,
imports
from Australia
has
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have
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shown
increase
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an increase
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since the start of
period
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the period
a period
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, with
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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of
trend
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the trend
a trend
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by
dip
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a dip
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down in the middle, even though it has
raised
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risen
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at
end
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the end
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.
Although
,
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apply
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Imports
from Japan
has
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apply
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showed
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a comparetively
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comparetively
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comparatively
similar trend at
start
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the start
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,
it
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they
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decreased sharply
begining
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beginning
of
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in
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2000 until
further
.
To begin
with, Australian
imports
has
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have
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showed
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shown
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a steady increase since 1994.
This
started nearly at
NZ
$ 4000
million
,
then
rose sharply until
in
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apply
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1996, at which point that
dip
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dipped
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dramatically with almost
a
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apply
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half-way
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halfway
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from
NZ
$6500 to 3000
million
in 1999. It escalated dramatically
afterward
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afterwards
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, and it
peak
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peaks
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NZ
$8000
millon
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million
in 2004 with
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a substanial
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substanial decrese
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substantial decrease
in 2002.
In contrast
, New Zealand
imports
began the period at
NZ
$3000
million
and showed a rose sharply,
then
purpassed
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passed
NZ
$6000
million
in
middle
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the middle
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of
year
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the year
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1997, which became continuel fluctuation between 1997 and 2000. Even if
this
trend reached
to
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apply
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NZ
$6000
million
point, it fell markedly until
next
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the next
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four years duration in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words imports, nz, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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