You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The pie chart gives information in percentages about UK public sector members occupied by
age
over a period of 5 years.  
Overall
, the pie chart was divided into 5 subcategories with the range of their
age
groups. We observe that the
age
group between 21-30 remains the highest percentage of staff who are employed in the public sector in both time periods. Looking into the details, Staff who are above 21 and below 30 were found better in
public
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sector in 2020 there was a sudden jump from 23% to 33%.
Similarly
, workers over 40 and under 50
grow
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by almost 10 per cent in 2020. The
age
group over 50 shrinks drastically from 23% to 16%.
Similarly
to the employees between 31-40.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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