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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The two pie
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 illustrate the ratio of various types of
energy
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production
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 in France in 1995 and 2005.
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, in both years coal and gas accounted for over half of all
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 other
energy
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 sources. There was only a very minimal increase in
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 from gas and coal,
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 nuclear and other sources almost doubled. Petrol was the only
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 source to decrease over the period.
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 produced by coal comprised
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29.80% in 1995 and by 2005, it increased by about 1 % to 30.9%.
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, the amount of
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 generated by gas went up by approximately 1% from 29.63% in the first year to 30.1% by the final year. The use of nuclear power rose significantly from 6.40% in 1995 to 10.10% in 2005. Other sources of
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production
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 accounted for 4.90% but
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 climbed to 9.10%. Petrol,
on the other hand
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, produced 29.27% of all the
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 in 1995 but after a decade only 19.55% of
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 came from
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 source.
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, petrol stayed in the third place of the
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.
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