The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.
The
line
graph highlights data how
many Change preposition
on how
women
was
born in England Correct subject-verb agreement
were
during
1973 to 2020 .
Which are births per 1000 Change preposition
from
famles
.
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families
females
Overall
, over the years the most popular gender of women
was between 20 to 25 in contrast
the yellow line's
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lines
line
was
lost Unnecessary verb
apply
it
interest for Change the pronoun
its
women
for unchanged in
almost the years. Change preposition
apply
However
the Add a comma
However,
women
who Correct quantifier usage
number of women
has
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have
age
between 28 to 34 Add an article
an age
their
was increased generally Replace the word
there
while
the blue line
their
kept the numbers under around 20 throughout Correct pronoun usage
apply
years
.
Looking at the details, in 1973 the age nuder 20 and over 40 Correct article usage
the years
stay
have Wrong verb form
stayed
similar
rate until Correct article usage
a similar
in
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apply
the
2008 Change the article
apply
although
there was rise
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a rise
from
the Change preposition
in
women
of age nuder
20 to reach Correct your spelling
under
to
20 per 1000 Change preposition
apply
famles
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families
females
while
aged 40 was
below 20.
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were
On the other hand
, the orange figures saw the highest level in 1973 after
that Correct word choice
and after
being to decrease
dramatically even Verb problem
decreased
2008
year Change preposition
in 2008
next,
at the end
line
was made up Correct article usage
the line
20
per 1000 Change preposition
of 20
women
.regarding the grey line
is
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it
increasing
until 1980 Wrong verb form
increased
then
it had the Correct your spelling
same
samed
level after which overtaking the orange Correct your spelling
same
line
to growth till in last
period in the chartSubmitted by sialamer on
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