The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.

The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.
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many
women
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were
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born in England
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1973 to 2020 . Which are births per 1000
famles
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families
females
.
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, over the years the most popular gender of
women
was between 20 to 25
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was
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lost
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interest for
women
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almost the years.
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the
women
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number of women
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who
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age
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an age
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between 28 to 34
their
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was increased generally
while
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kept the numbers under around 20 throughout
years
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. Looking at the details, in 1973 the age nuder 20 and over 40
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have
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rate until
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the
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2008
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from
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the
women
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20 to reach
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20 per 1000
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families
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below 20.
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dramatically even
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year
next,
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was made up
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per 1000
women
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it
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increasing
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until 1980
then
it had the
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same
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same
level after which overtaking the orange
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to growth till in
last
period in the chart
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