You have lost something on a bus and called customer service to get help. You weren't happy with their response. Write a letter to the bus company manager. In your letter, you should: · describe the item you lost · explain why you weren't happy with the customer service · say what action you would like the company to take.
Dear Sir/Madam,
Hope
this
letter finds you well .I am writing this
letter to express my sadness regarding the customer service of your bus
.
Well,my name is Navdeep and I use your bus
number 784 daily for commute
to work.Actually Add an article
the commute
a commute
last
day when I returned Correct article usage
the last
at
home I Change preposition
apply
come
to Wrong verb form
came
knew
that I Wrong verb form
know
have
lost my Wrong verb form
had
airpod
Change the capitalization
Airpod
in
the Change preposition
on
bus
while
sitting because last
time I used my Correct article usage
the last
airpod
Change the capitalization
Airpod
in
the Change preposition
on
bus
for listening
Change preposition
to listen
music
.
Change preposition
to music
In addition
to this
, when I call your customer service to registered
Replace the word
register
complaint
.Correct article usage
a complaint
Firstly
,they don't
Wrong verb form
didn't
listen
my whole statement and Add the preposition
listen to
moreover
When I asked them to the
share the address for lost and found items where I can go and find my stuff they Correct article usage
apply
don't
provide which makes me unhappy about their service.
In the Wrong verb form
didn't
last
,I want you to look at this
matter on
Change preposition
as
top
Correct article usage
a top
most
priority and If possible kindly contact Correct quantifier usage
apply
at
my phone number so I can provide you Correct pronoun usage
me at
more
information about my lost item.
looking forward to hearing from Change preposition
with more
your
side.
Yours Faithfully,
NavdeepCorrect pronoun usage
you
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grammar
Ensure to check grammar and punctuation, for example 'Hope this letter finds you well .' should not have a space before the full stop.
structure
Consider using paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas, this can help improve readability and clarity.
clarity
You have clearly described the item lost and explained why you were unhappy with the service.
tone
You have appropriately used a formal tone, which is suitable for this type of letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite