You are being harassed wrongly by Debt Collection Agency for the amount that you did not spend on your credit card. Write a letter to Banking Ombudsman Department and escalate the complaint. In your letter, • introduce yourself • describe what happened • say what you want the officer to do

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Dear Agency, I'm writing

this

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email to address the issue regarding about amount which didn't spend on my credit card. My name is

dhivya

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Divya

ravi

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Ravi

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and

I'm

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I've been

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holding an account in your bank

over

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for over

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two years.

Few

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A few

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days ago, I received a call from your bank,

stated

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stating

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that need to pay the amount for my credit card. For your clarification, I haven't

spend

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spent

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any amount on my credit card. I frequently

receiving

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receive

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the

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apply

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call

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calls

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from your bank

especially

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, especially

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during

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working times which indirectly affects

focus

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my focus

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on my work. I kindly

requesting

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request

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you to take

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apply

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immediate action to resolve

this

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matter as soon as possible.

In addition

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, please escalate teams to remove my

names

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name

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from

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the debit collection list so that

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wont

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won't

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receive the call. If you need any information regarding

detail

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details

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, please let me know. Thank you Dhivya Ravi

dhivyaravi0396Wed Oct 30 2024

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What works well

Coherence and Cohesion

Your opening and closing are well-structured, greeting the agency respectfully and providing a clear sign-off.

Task Achievement

The task is mostly achieved; you successfully introduced yourself, explained the issue, and stated your request.

Improvement Suggestions

Coherence and Cohesion

To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure a clear and logical connection between ideas by using more cohesive devices (e.g., linking words like 'however,' 'furthermore').

Task Achievement

In terms of writing tone, using more formal expressions would enhance the professionalism of the letter. Replacing words like 'kindly' with phrases like 'I would appreciate it if...' can increase formality.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

141 words

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You are being harassed wrongly by Debt Collection Agency for the amount that you did not spend on your credit card. Write a letter to Banking Ombudsman Department and escalate the complaint. In your letter, • introduce yourself • describe what happened • say what you want the officer to do

What works well

Improvement Suggestions

The Closing

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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think that this is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both view points and give your opinion.

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