The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in five economic sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.
The line bar above gives information about five
section
of USA labour force employment between 1930 and 2010.
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sections
Overall
, except for farming,fishing and foresting which experienced downward
trend and other services that Correct article usage
a downward
was
steady, other sectors Change the verb form
were
such
as industrial, sales and
office and technical had witnessed upward trends.
The farming,fishing and foresting rate started at over 70% in 1930 and by the year 1970 it Correct word choice
apply
decrease
quickly Wrong verb form
decreased
anf
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and
finally
hit the bottom line at
2010 with nearly 5 percentages.Change preposition
in
Also
other services section didn't fluctuate much during Add a comma
Also,
this
period of 80 years.
Other sections such
as industrial, sales and
office and technical started at Correct word choice
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low
rate Add an article
a low
about
10% and over 80 Change preposition
of about
year
they had Change to a plural noun
years
gradual
increase and Correct article usage
a gradual
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their rates
rates
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rate
of
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apply
them
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apply
at the end
of year 2010 was 35%,
20% and 35% perspectivly
.Correct your spelling
respectively
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