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Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparson

Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparson
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The pie charts above
exhibit
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show
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 the percentage of British students at a university in England who were able to speak other languages
beside
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 English in 2000 and 2010. The two diagrams show that Spanish remained
as
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the popular foreign language, as it is spoken by roughly a third of the participants.
Furthermore
, there is a resurgence in
another
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other
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 language speakers from 15% to 20%, probably caused by an influx of international students in the country.
On the other hand
, the percentage of
student
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students
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 who only
speaks
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speak
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 English has decreased from previously 1 out of 5 to only 1 out of 10.
In addition
, there is
also
 a decline related to
whose
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those
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 who are fluent in French, as the percentage saw a decline from 15% to 10%.
Last
 but not least, the portion of those who comprehend more than two other languages and those who understand German remained the same, each at only 10%.
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