The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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, we are
must Unnecessary verb
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to
look general picture. İn Change the verb form
apply
Ryeslip
village borroing
amount is Correct your spelling
borrowing
consistantly
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consistently
decrase
. Sutton Wood village Correct your spelling
decrease
show
us unpredictable, Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
high
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apply
volatil
movement. İf we Correct your spelling
volatile
volatility
are
look at Unnecessary verb
apply
Ryeslip
in
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apply
there
borrowing number Correct your spelling
their
is increasingly be
higher but it's not so huge movement it's just Change the verb form
is increasingly
twofold
increase in four Correct article usage
a twofold
mounth
. Correct your spelling
months
month
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in
West Eaton Change preposition
apply
show
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shows
same
movement Correct article usage
the same
like
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as
Ryeslip
. in
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this
point I see a correlation over here. Both of
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apply
village's
borrowing Change noun form
villages'
attitude
in Fix the agreement mistake
attitudes
initial
close Correct article usage
the initial
however
after every month difference getting more result
of Fix the agreement mistake
results
this
in ryeslip
consolidation be
happen
İn addition types of Verb problem
apply
book borrowed
data Add a hyphen
book-borrowed
is
provide us Change the verb form
are
more
data for making solid comments. Change preposition
with more
Reason
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The reason
of
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for
this
correlation between West Eaton and Church can be basis
of content similarity Add an article
the basis
however
for
limited information we can't reach any conclusion. Change preposition
with
eason
of Correct your spelling
reason
this
correlation between West Eaton and Church can be basis
of content similarity Add an article
the basis
however
for
limited information we can't reach any conclusion. Change preposition
with
Besides
in first
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the first
paragraph
we catch Add a comma
paragraph,
unregular
movements from Sutton Wood. History books are often Correct your spelling
irregular
using
in special celebration days. Wrong verb form
used
For
instance
parents can Add a comma
instance,
borrowing
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borrow
historicial
books Correct your spelling
historical
for
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to
explaning
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explain
their
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to their
childs
, how difficult a country is Correct your spelling
children
builted
.Correct your spelling
built
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